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pinerow Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat May-14-05 08:54 AM
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The Day I Closed My Heart
Ramon Piñero 08.16.2003
It was a day
like
many others,
nothing unique
about this
one,
just like
yesterday;
sun came up
sun went down
Just another
day
in the
life.

The day
I closed
my heart
was much
like
any other;
Fed the dog;
let him out
let him
back in
the
house;

Except this
day
I closed
my heart;
shut it
down;
a flame
doused
with
heartbreak
and lies.

A day like
any other,
nothing
special;
except
when
she walked by,
I felt
nothing
Nada
Zilch
Uggatz

That was
the day
I shut
down
all
emotion;
threw it
right
out into
the
night
never to
return.

I loved her
once;
I could
not
live
without
her smile;

Her touch,
her loving
embrace;
were all
food
for my soul
(alimento del
alma)

That was
the day
when the
kiss
meant
nothing
more
than a
peck
on a cold
cheek.

That was
the day
I closed it;
My heart
put up a
vacant
sign.
No one
lives
there
anymore.

It’s not for
sale
or
lease
just weeds
of
lies and
deceit
broken
promises
shattered
like
glass;
shards
everywhere,
watch your
step
would not
want
you to fall
and hurt
yourself.

That was
the day;
Nothing
remarkable
about it,
except
that is
was
the day
I
shut the
door
and left
her
out in
the
cold.



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Droopy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat May-14-05 02:39 PM
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1. It's weird how life changing events
can happen in a somewhat uneventful way. I've had that happen to me on a few occasions.
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oneighty Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat May-14-05 03:29 PM
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2. Sigh
I hope this is just a poem and not a life.

You have been delinquent. Explain?

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pinerow Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat May-14-05 05:12 PM
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3. Been out of town...no computers..no T.V...no cell phones...
no pagers...no electronic leashes...I have to do that every now and then...helps maintain what little sanity I have left.
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oneighty Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat May-14-05 05:51 PM
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4. Good on you!
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KaliTracy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat May-14-05 11:23 PM
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5. the progression here is strong, starts
off rather on the everyday side, and suddenly takes the reader deeper, and by the end, the shut of the door can be heard.

thanks for sharing this.


***

and welcome back! :hi:
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pinerow Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sun May-15-05 11:48 AM
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6. Thank for the welcome...
nt
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