This is my last poem for the workshop I'm taking...

[CaliforniaPeggy]

Nobody knows where I am


Image

The camera
reaches out

misses
her eyes
blank
not smiling

she is
though

Her mouth
an open door

strange
as though she’s someplace
else

Maybe
she loves you

No way to know
not in this
picture

you’ll need
to get
closer

to her thousand
daylit
thoughts

Can you



© 2009 MLC

[NYC_SKP]

1. I love these...

The ones that make me think, make me re-read, and go.... ahhhh!

:hug:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

2. My dear NYC_SKP!

Glad you enjoyed it!

I had to end with a question, but no question mark...

I had to weave into the original poem some other poetic fragments...those are in italics.

I'm really happy with it.

Tomorrow night I'll find out what my classmates think!

:hug:

[NYC_SKP]

11. It is like two poems interwoven, each is the subtext for the other...

Fuckin' awesome!

:hug:

[av8rdave]

3. Outstanding!

Thanks for posting!

[CaliforniaPeggy]

4. My dear av8rdave!

Why, thank you!

I appreciate your kind remarks a lot!

:hi:

[abq e streeter]

5. I think the last one of yours that I commented on,I said "one of the best of yours that I ever read"

ditto AT LEAST, for this one. Very encouraging for me , in my late fifties now, and still trying to improve as a singer, musician, and hoping to maybe even resume writing again, to see that in your 60's ( if I'm not mistaken) you're still growing as a poet. This really was one of those to read several times over and then ponder.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

7. My dear abq e streeter...

Yes, I'm in my 60's....nearly 66 now! I started writing poetry about 4 years ago...

It's never too late! I hope to grow as long as I live.

This workshop has shown me that I can do it...

I really appreciate your very thoughtful comments.

Thank you!

:hug:

[Capn Sunshine]

6. Damn, Peggy, that is stellar

fantastic imagery. Nice commentary. Heat and expectation All without sex! Who knew?

[CaliforniaPeggy]

8. My dear Capn Sunshine...

This one isn't about sex...for once.

It was originally inspired by a photo of a woman who was smiling, but not with her eyes. Her expression struck me, and this poem was the result.

Thank you!

:hug:

[question everything]

9. Oh, Dear CaliforniaPeggy

I actually feel the sense of anticipation, wanting to know how it will end.

What a gift you have, and how generous you are to share it here.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

10. My dear question everything!

Wow!

I trust you enjoyed the ending...

I had a lot of fun writing it...

Thank you for your very generous comments...they mean so much.


:hug:

[UrbScotty]

12. My dear CaliforniaPeggy!

They just keep getting better!

:hug:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

14. My dear UrbScotty!

Ah, I thank you!

I just returned home from my workshop, and my teacher and my classmates agree...

I am finding my voice...

:hug:

[Prisoner_Number_Six]

13. Have you published yet?

You really should be submitting these.

:hug:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

15. My dear Prisoner_Number_Six!

I have several out that I'm waiting to hear about.

Believe me, you WILL know if they get published!

Thank you, sweetie...

Your praise means quite a lot to me...

:hug:

[NanceGreggs]

16. "You'll need to get closer ...

... can you?"

It's the question every woman wants to ask, and no man wants to answer.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

21. Indeed, my dear Nance...

Some men want to answer...


;-)

[PBS Poll-435]

17. Fire, Life, and Intrigue

I had to read it 3 times to make sure it was as good as I thought it was.


:yourock:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

22. Thank you so much, my dear PBS Poll-435!

It looks simple...

I appreciate your comments so much!

:hug:

[old mark]

18. Peg, you are very talented and deep.

I believe you really benefitted from that workshop-most people don't- and it's a pleasure to read your work.

mark

[CaliforniaPeggy]

23. My dear old mark...

Last night, I thanked everyone for their help. I really felt as though I've learned quite a lot in these weeks...

I know I still have much to learn, but now the path is open.

I definitely will be taking more workshops from Brendan; he is outstanding!

Thank you so much for your very kind remarks...It means a lot.

:hug:

[Haole Girl]

19. This is good

Really. :-)

[CaliforniaPeggy]

24. My dear Haole Girl...

Thank you, sweetie.....so much!

:hug:

[Highway61]

20. Sticks in your head for a time

Like it. Well done.

brings me back to a time during the 60's where you can go into coffee houses in The Village in NY, listen to ... then discuss. Cool, very cool.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

25. My dear Highway61...

I loved the 60's too.

Glad you enjoyed my little work...

Thank you!

:hug: