A new poem from me..."Grief"

[CaliforniaPeggy]

The clock ticks
The light dims
Someone comes home
I don’t know who

It’s late afternoon
But it could be anytime
Dinner’s cooking downstairs
Did I do that?
I don’t remember

I’m hollow inside
The landscape is altered
By his absence

I drift here

Illness coming on
I’m disoriented
My skin shrivels
Deep breaths hurt
I cannot walk
Or cry


© MLC

[UrbScotty]

1. My dear CaliforniaPeggy...

I think most of us have dealt with grief at one point or another in our lives. I have a few times, but not as much as some have.

For some reason, this poem seems to speak to me, even though it's been a few years since someone close to me has passed.

Thank you for sharing this.

:hug:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

2. My dear UrbScotty...

I've dealt with it too, but not as much as some either...

This just struck me the other day, and I ran with it.

I hasten to add that I'm not in a depressed state; this poem is not about me...

Thank you, sweetie...

:hug:

[GoddessOfGuinness]

3. Dear Peggy...

This is deeply moving. Thank you for sharing it here. :hug::hug::hug:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

4. My dear GoddessOfGuinness...

I am honored that you found this so moving...

Thank you for telling me...:hug:

[NYC_SKP]

5. Ohhhh.

:cry:

He'll be back!

Peggy, your words are so beautiful...and moving.

:hug:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

6. My dear NYC_SKP...

Ah, sweetie...this is fiction...

Not to worry...It really isn't me.

I'm pleased as can be that you found it beautiful...and moving.

Thank you, sweetie...

Let me know if you'd like me to read it to you...

It's been awhile...

:hug:

[seaker]

7. Poignant...

Portends of sweet times and loss to come...bitter sweet and necessary.
Thank you dear CaliforniaPeggy.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

8. My dear seaker...

I hoped you would come by...

Thank you for your very kind words...

:hug:

[seaker]

9. Thank you, sweetie.

Back at you!
:hug: :hug: :hug:
:pals: :pals: :pals:

[abq e streeter]

10. that's REALLY GOOD

don't know what else to say ...

[CaliforniaPeggy]

11. My dear abq e streeter!

That's enough for me!

Thank you, sweetie...

:hug:

And thank you for coming by...

[BlueIris]

12. Your work is getting so good. I love the way this illustrates the utterly draining nature

of grief. When one is grieving, the everyday is beyond tedious.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

18. My dear BlueIris...

I am honored in the extreme by your praise. Wow.

The everyday is beyond tedious. Exactly.

Thank you!

:hug:

[PBS Poll-435]

13. I love the transition from the very literal to the more emotional/psychological.

Way cool. :thumbsup:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

19. My dear PBS Poll-435...

I hadn't even been consciously aware that I'd done that transition...

Isn't it funny how you can write something, and not see or understand what you did?

Thank you for illuminating that for me! And, of course, for your praise...

:hug:

[6000eliot]

14. Peggy, Who is the speaker,

and what is the situation the poem describes?

[CaliforniaPeggy]

20. My dear 6000eliot...

I was the speaker...

I was having a sad day, missing a friend. I had these strange feelings, and decided to write them down, and see where they led me...

I hope you enjoyed this...

:hi:

[6000eliot]

32. I enjoyed it very much, Peggy.

You improve with each poem I read. I think I'm getting inspired to try some poetry again.

[momto3]

15. This is really good.

It touches me. You are an artist with words.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

21. My dear momto3...

I'm so glad this touched you!

Thank you...

:hug:

[cwydro]

16. I like that Peggy.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

22. My dear cwydro!

Cool!

Thanks, sweetie... :hug:

[Dystopian]

17. Peggy...

You are a gifted poet. I read this last night, but could not reply.
It hit too close to home.
Your poem, my reality....
I know we can all relate.....
Thank you for sharing ....

peace~

[CaliforniaPeggy]

23. My dear Dystopian...

A friend once told me, long ago, that the more personal the work is, the more universal it is.

Perhaps I have succeeded at that...

I have to share. If I didn't get these words out, I would just explode...

I'm so pleased my little work spoke to you...

Thank you!

:hug:

[Pool Hall Ace]

24. It makes me think of the death of a marriage. :(

:cry:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

26. My dear Pool Hall Ace...

It does sound that way, doesn't it? One of many possible interpretations...

:hug:

[La Lioness Priyanka]

25. hmm... did your husband go somewhere? did something happen?

it sounds like this poem is about missing your partner.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

27. My dear Pri...

No, no...nothing like that! My husband and I are really good...

I was a little down, and decided to see where it would take me poetically...

And this was the result.

:hug:

Nice to see you today!

[raccoon]

28. My dear Peggy, I like this, especially:

"I’m hollow inside
The landscape is altered
By his absence"

[CaliforniaPeggy]

29. My dear raccoon...

I'm glad!

Thank you, sweetie...

The words show up...I just write 'em down...

:hug:

[hibbing]

30. Thank you Peggy

Hi Peggy,
Thanks for sharing this with us all. After reading everyone's comments I see that I had a totally different interpretation/understanding of it, most likely from issues going on with my own life.

Peace

[CaliforniaPeggy]

31. My dear hibbing...

I think this is the beauty of such a poem. Everyone can bring their own interpretation to it...

It's always my pleasure to share...

Thank you!

:hug: