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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:37 PM Original message |
Grammar whores, check in. I need a little sentence structure advice... |
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billyskank (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:39 PM Response to Original message |
1. You should take my advice with a pinch of salt |
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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:42 PM Response to Reply #1 |
2. Observed |
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Oeditpus Rex (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:46 PM Response to Original message |
3. One can't encounter 'how' |
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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:49 PM Response to Reply #3 |
7. Thank you. |
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sarge43 (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:46 PM Response to Original message |
4. Change |
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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:50 PM Response to Reply #4 |
8. More great suggestions. |
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seemunkee (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:48 PM Response to Original message |
5. sex thread |
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gr8dane_daddy (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 02:39 AM Response to Reply #5 |
42. Damn, I thought we were gonna talk about my favorite subject too! |
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skygazer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:48 PM Response to Original message |
6. I find the wording a bit awkward |
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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:51 PM Response to Reply #6 |
9. All right, very cool. |
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skygazer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:52 PM Response to Reply #9 |
11. I like sarge43's suggestion as well |
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MonkeyFunk (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 02:38 AM Response to Reply #6 |
41. no! |
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Dora (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:52 PM Response to Original message |
10. Awk all the way around... |
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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:54 PM Response to Reply #10 |
12. Well that would set up a contingency that wouldn't reflect the rest... |
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Dora (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:57 PM Response to Reply #12 |
14. Yeah - it was hard to revise w/out knowing more. |
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montanto (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:57 PM Response to Original message |
13. Drop the first comma. |
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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:01 PM Response to Reply #13 |
17. Okay... I see what you mean. |
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benny05 (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 03:00 AM Response to Reply #13 |
44. I agree... |
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trof (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 05:59 PM Response to Original message |
15. Short sentences are 'better' than long ones with clauses. |
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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:00 PM Response to Reply #15 |
16. Actually I have that on my shelf, darn it. |
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Coyote_Bandit (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:04 PM Response to Original message |
18. I would reword it |
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bridgit (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:04 PM Response to Original message |
19. "...of political bias 'may' cloud one's judgment..." |
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Deep13 (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:06 PM Response to Reply #19 |
21. "may" indicates discretion, "can" simply ... |
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bridgit (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:14 PM Response to Reply #21 |
22. 'perceptions' regarding 'bias' are oft times understood as discretions... |
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Deep13 (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:05 PM Response to Original message |
20. dump the comma, replace encountered with experienced |
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Shakespeare (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:16 PM Response to Reply #20 |
24. I think "observed" works better than either word. And, further thoughts.... |
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Deep13 (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 09:02 AM Response to Reply #24 |
45. Observed is too passive. This is a resume or application of some kind. |
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marzipanni (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:16 PM Response to Original message |
23. I vote for #1 + #6 n/t |
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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:18 PM Response to Original message |
25. *** Okay! Here is my next revision. *** |
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Shakespeare (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:24 PM Response to Reply #25 |
27. That second sentence is still awfully awkward and unclear. n/t |
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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:25 PM Response to Reply #27 |
29. How about this... |
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Shakespeare (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:28 PM Response to Reply #29 |
32. That works much better. |
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Hosnon (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:25 PM Response to Reply #25 |
28. Should there be an "an" before "individual's"? |
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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:26 PM Response to Reply #28 |
30. Yes, there should be. |
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Maddy McCall (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:27 PM Response to Reply #25 |
31. Here: |
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liberal hypnotist (391 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:35 PM Response to Reply #25 |
33. Much Better |
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JustABozoOnThisBus (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:21 PM Response to Original message |
26. I like billyskank's |
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sweetheart (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 06:48 PM Response to Original message |
34. sweethearted |
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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 02:24 AM Response to Reply #34 |
38. LOL |
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Spider Jerusalem (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 07:02 PM Response to Original message |
35. Edited: |
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Writer (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 02:28 AM Response to Reply #35 |
39. Beautiful. I could kiss you. |
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Ms_Dem_Meanor (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 07:34 PM Response to Original message |
36. b n/t |
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sir_captain (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Thu Dec-14-06 07:42 PM Response to Original message |
37. Your tenses don't agree |
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reyd reid reed (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 02:33 AM Response to Original message |
40. Change it. |
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grasswire (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore | Fri Dec-15-06 02:59 AM Response to Original message |
43. I agree. Start over. |
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