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Tucker08087

(621 posts)
Thu May 28, 2020, 09:25 PM May 2020

Drowning in Grief

? Maybe as a title?

Very personal and I think it’s pretty. I live on the coast, so I find I often use salt water imagery.


Lying in our bed alone
Your touch-
Your touch too far to reach
Memories of we
Wash over me
Like waves rolling on the beach

First they’re lapping at my edges
Then I’m crashing to the ground
The swirling tides of yesterday
Left me-
Left me almost drowned

And I was falling
Twisting and tumbling in the surf
Couldn’t find the place between heaven
Between heaven
And the earth

The darkness of pain was suffocating
Looking up and searching for the light
Almost didn’t care
If I ran out of air
I’d lost
I’d lost the will to fight

The tears, they left me breathless
Like the rolling crashing of the waves
Clinging to some picture perfect fantasy
Of more idyllic days

And I was falling
Twisting and crashing through the surf
Couldn’t find the place between heaven
Between heaven
And the earth

The tide, you know
It ebbs and flows
But never looks for fault
Washes away
The pain of yesterday
But leaves
Leaves the taste of salt

And the rippled sea of life
Even after all these years
Baptizes me
With seasoned memories
Tasting vaguely of my tears

And I was falling
Tumbling and crashing through the surf
Couldn’t find the place between heaven
Between heaven
And the earth

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Drowning in Grief (Original Post) Tucker08087 May 2020 OP
From deep within you have a place you share with us ... nice. 42bambi May 2020 #1
Thank you. Tucker08087 May 2020 #4
I think this is very beautiful and evocative. The imagery and emotion captivated me. SaveOurDemocracy May 2020 #2
Thank you for reading! Tucker08087 May 2020 #3
It was my pleasure, though bittersweet. SaveOurDemocracy May 2020 #5
K&R SaveOurDemocracy May 2020 #6
Thank you for sharing your feelings and your art... Blue Montana Jul 2020 #7
Thank you so much! Tucker08087 Jul 2020 #8

SaveOurDemocracy

(4,397 posts)
2. I think this is very beautiful and evocative. The imagery and emotion captivated me.
Thu May 28, 2020, 09:59 PM
May 2020

'Memories of We' could be a nice title, a little more subtle than 'Drowning in Grief', which is seen and felt throughout the poem. Only you know what it should be named.

Thank you for sharing with us. Peace and love to you.

Blue Montana

(13 posts)
7. Thank you for sharing your feelings and your art...
Wed Jul 1, 2020, 03:55 PM
Jul 2020

That's some fine word-smithing. I truly appreciate your honest approach and your flow is very easy to follow. Thank you very much for sharing your fine artwork. It was a pleasure.

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